2020山东潍坊二模英语读后续 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。 I received an urgent call from my aunt. " Turn on the TV. Granny's on the Channel 10 news. " It turned out that Granny had made a sandwich run for her office and was stopped at a red light downtown. She had the window rolled down to enjoy the breeze when a man rushed up to the driver's side window, intending to carjack（劫车）her. Now, what the would-be carjacker couldn't have known was that this woman simply wasn't " a granny" . This was Nancy Johnson — the same woman who owned and lived on a Texas cattle farm, drove her own tractors, and dug her own post holes to lay fence. The week before, she had shot a rattlesnake and chopped off its head with a shovel. She was the proud owner of the new minivan（小型货车）she was driving. In other words, she was not your normal kind of granny. The carjacker leaned into the open window, one hand stuffed in his pocket, and said, " Get out of this car. I have a gun, and I will shoot you.” A statement like that would have terrified anyone else. Instead, Granny saw it as a challenge." If you really had a gun in your pocket, you would've pulled it out and led with that first," she shouted at him, apparently unworried. She was right. The criminal didn't have a gun. He instead reached into the window, grabbed her, and tried to pull her out of the van. He pulled open the door, wildly catching Granny's arms. Granny leaned her shoulder inside to press the horn（喇叭) and started yelling to make people around notice what was happening. With the door now open, she held tight the steering wheel with one arm and started kicking the man anywhere her foot could make contact. This tall woman had quite a reach. paragraph 1：After a well-placed kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run.____ paragraph 2: Later, we asked? Granny, don’t you realize you could have got yourself killed?”___ 构思： 本文是一篇读后续写。 本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的奶奶开车上街。在停车等红绿灯的时候遇到了拦路抢劫犯。作者的奶奶没有被吓到，反而在路上和抢劫犯做斗争。抓住了抢劫犯，并因此上了电视。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：在踢了一脚后，这名男子被击倒，并试图放开她并逃跑……，所以这一段应该写歹徒试图逃跑而奶奶伙同其他人制服歹徒，并因此上了电视。要详细写奶奶是如何抓住那个歹徒的。第二段开头是：后来，我们问:“奶奶，难道你没有意识到你会被人盯上 1 吗?” 本段应该写奶奶不畏惧任何坏人。并且通过奶奶的事迹，教会了我们一些人身哲理：我们要无所畏惧。 文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:with的复合结构With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came；定语从句：But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years等。高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。 答案：After a well-placed kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run. But Granny wouldn’t stand for that. It was now her turn to grab onto him, her hands made strong from hours and hours of farm work. That poor fool didn’t have a chance. She shouted for help to bystanders, and they rushed to her aid. With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came. A silver-haired woman had just made a citizen’s arrest. Later, we asked “Granny, don’t you realize you could have got yourself hilled?” Granny’s answer was surprisingly amusing and simple: “I wasn’t scared of that little idiot. I’d had my brand-new van for less than two days and a pack of good sandwiches for my office. And there was no way he was going to get either of those!” But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years. She encouraged us to push boundaries and expectations. But even more so, she taught us fearlessness. 读后续写问题与建议 一、问题： 1.原文阅读理解不到位。人物身份混乱，不知道the tall woman就是granny；没有找准故事情节发展伏笔，与原文情景融洽度不高。 2．提示句理解不到位。第一段提示句暗示granny在搏斗中逐渐占据上风， 劫车贼企图松手逃跑，这时应该写granny不放手，如何成功将其抓住的。但学生习作中，许多学生还是继续描写劫车贼拿出刀子，继续搏斗，或者逃脱成功，granny开车追赶等情节，与提示句和原文衔接不够。第二段提示句中暗示续写部分应该写granny当时的心理变化和从granny身上学到的优秀品质（勇敢，无畏， 冷静）。但许多学生偏离主题，变成寻求帮助或帮助别人。或者主题升华太高，把这种行为当成一种责任。 3．语言表达错误， 1)语言表达不地道，词汇和句式表达不丰富 2）仍然存在汉语式思维表达。如：granny crashed the car.; in a nobody street; the phone don’t’ useful； 2 本文来源：https://www.wddqw.com/doc/232dc1e233126edb6f1aff00bed5b9f3f90f72a4.html